The way you captured that space between worry and love felt so real. Everly’s thoughts spinning, the fear, the vulnerability, then that gentle shift into tenderness… it hit my heart. It felt like being reminded that sometimes the love is there, even when our minds try to convince us otherwise. This was soft, emotional, and beautiful to read.
I wanted to capture those moments where our mind and our hearts play tricks on us. Good intentions leading to silly solutions leading to misunderstandings.
This was such a fun little rollercoaster — I was right there with Everly, piling up wild theories and mentally side-eyeing George before we knew the truth.
You did such a great job balancing the humor, the suspense, and the sweetness at the end.
The “alarm to sneak back into bed” detail just about melted me. I didn’t see that twist coming at all, which made it even better.
This one felt like a perfect blend of playful mystery and heartfelt resolution. Can’t wait to see the next story you have in the works!
I have a bad memory on some things so I use labels in alarms a lot. If I have an alarm and it doesn't immediately remind me why I set it up for, I may never do what I set it up to do in the first place 😂
Initially I thought the alarm would only say "go back to bed" but then I thought that wasn't clear enough for someone who can be absent-minded, so I changed it to something more personal.
It also made sense for someone wanting to be "sneaky" about a needlessly complicated solution to sneak back into bed, right when it was less likely to ruin her sleep.
Poor George has a good heart but he's not helping himself 😂
I really like it! Very relatable overthinking 😅 I thought the book was just haunted but you explained it really well that was not the case 🤣 my favorite part is when he explaining and her inner monolog is talking about how dead he is and then him being resurrected and he doesn't even know it.
I had a blast writing that part because as I started writing his part, oblivious as he was, I realized "oh no, this doesn't sound good" but I knew I had to keep going because well... he was oblivious! 😂
You're really good at writing stories. I encourage you to write more of them. You managed to capture the emotional tension of the female character very well, and was totally relatable. 😄
I thought for a second that the snoring might be the reason, but the sweater was the thing that gave me second thoughts. 😃
Haha, now that you say it, yes, but I opened it from the email and scrolled straight to the story. Sorry I missed the title, my bad! But yes, it's implied in the title if you don't miss it. 😅 Looking forward to more stories! 🤍
Well that is a heartwarming story! Here you had me all set for a salacious story of infidelity and heartache. But no. Instead you cleverly led us down the mystery path to the wrong assumptions. Well played, sir. Well played, indeed.
I think he did! His solution is sensible, caring, and kind. His partner needs to not jump to conclusions! Okay, maybe it was unnecessarily complicated…
The way you captured that space between worry and love felt so real. Everly’s thoughts spinning, the fear, the vulnerability, then that gentle shift into tenderness… it hit my heart. It felt like being reminded that sometimes the love is there, even when our minds try to convince us otherwise. This was soft, emotional, and beautiful to read.
Another beautifully thoughtful comment!
You warm my heart Belinda.
I wanted to capture those moments where our mind and our hearts play tricks on us. Good intentions leading to silly solutions leading to misunderstandings.
Never a lack of love.
I was getting mad with Everly, got humbled and melting with her.. It is very uncanny how I know someone like George😂
Someone who comes up with ridiculous solutions to problems that end up causing a lot of drama and confusion? 😂🤣
I love her inner monologue! This was a great short read and a sweet resolution. 💜
I loved writing it! It was funny and added the right level of tension 😁
Thank you for reading it and commenting Liora. 😊😌
this was such a fun and tender ride, you had me laughing, worrying, and melting all at once 🥹💓
Thank you so much for your comment Marialex!
Your reaction makes me feel like I succeeded in everything I accomplished to do with the story. 😁😊🙂↕️
This was such a fun little rollercoaster — I was right there with Everly, piling up wild theories and mentally side-eyeing George before we knew the truth.
You did such a great job balancing the humor, the suspense, and the sweetness at the end.
The “alarm to sneak back into bed” detail just about melted me. I didn’t see that twist coming at all, which made it even better.
This one felt like a perfect blend of playful mystery and heartfelt resolution. Can’t wait to see the next story you have in the works!
I have a bad memory on some things so I use labels in alarms a lot. If I have an alarm and it doesn't immediately remind me why I set it up for, I may never do what I set it up to do in the first place 😂
Initially I thought the alarm would only say "go back to bed" but then I thought that wasn't clear enough for someone who can be absent-minded, so I changed it to something more personal.
It also made sense for someone wanting to be "sneaky" about a needlessly complicated solution to sneak back into bed, right when it was less likely to ruin her sleep.
Poor George has a good heart but he's not helping himself 😂
I really like it! Very relatable overthinking 😅 I thought the book was just haunted but you explained it really well that was not the case 🤣 my favorite part is when he explaining and her inner monolog is talking about how dead he is and then him being resurrected and he doesn't even know it.
I had a blast writing that part because as I started writing his part, oblivious as he was, I realized "oh no, this doesn't sound good" but I knew I had to keep going because well... he was oblivious! 😂
The haunted book idea is hilarious, lol.
Maybe we can save that for a different story. 🤭
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You're really good at writing stories. I encourage you to write more of them. You managed to capture the emotional tension of the female character very well, and was totally relatable. 😄
I thought for a second that the snoring might be the reason, but the sweater was the thing that gave me second thoughts. 😃
Very good narrative, loved it!
Oh you almost figured it out!
I mean, it's kind of implied in the title, isn't it? 😂
But yeah, I needed to add some distractions. 😁
Thanks for the encouraging comment, I want to start writing more short stories, we'll see how that goes. 😊
Haha, now that you say it, yes, but I opened it from the email and scrolled straight to the story. Sorry I missed the title, my bad! But yes, it's implied in the title if you don't miss it. 😅 Looking forward to more stories! 🤍
Hahaha, don’t apologize, that’s actually kind of a compliment that you were so interested in reading it you didn’t even read the title!
Thanks you Valle 🙂↕️
Indeed, I was interested because I like the way you write, and when I have time (not that much lately), I try to keep up with the updates.
Well that is a heartwarming story! Here you had me all set for a salacious story of infidelity and heartache. But no. Instead you cleverly led us down the mystery path to the wrong assumptions. Well played, sir. Well played, indeed.
My misdirection worked! Yay! 😂
George is a good guy, just didn't think the solution through... 😅
I think he did! His solution is sensible, caring, and kind. His partner needs to not jump to conclusions! Okay, maybe it was unnecessarily complicated…
But it needed to be to make the story work!
Well, we needed some overthinking for there to be drama 😂
Everly's detective skills were on point though... 😎