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Ashes Of Love Poetry 🔥's avatar

The narrations are so spot on! Perfect choices for those characters! This is a really good one, it definitely tells a story and ends in doom which is very Cass 😅 the different acts hold different purposes and perspectives which are very compelling and I love that you had someone different narrate each one. I will in fact write one in cass's style. Well i have but I'm not done editing 😅

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Carlos M.'s avatar

Yeah!

I wanted the first part to narrate the "tragic" events. Then the second part to delve into the jester's psychology and the last one was about the only witness to the whole tragedy. 😊

I'm really happy with how the narration came together and now I'm looking forward to your Cass-inspired poem!

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Thomas Cargen's avatar

Amazing!

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Carlos M.'s avatar

Thanks Thomas! Really nice seeing you check the back catalog!

This was quite the one to put together. 😊

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Thomas Cargen's avatar

Wish I had more time

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Carlos M.'s avatar

Don't we all? I've been mostly just posting. Barely reading 😅

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Thomas Cargen's avatar

So good

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Darkly Dreaming Klar Nett's avatar

Oh this is a bit different for you Carlos. I think you should perhaps write more in this style. I loved the parts were you used rhymes. I know it's considered passe now in poetry but I can't help but love the rhythm that rhymes create, it just adds beautifully to the sometimes abstract content, grounds it in a way creating this wonderful balance.

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Carlos M.'s avatar

The style was an experiment because I was trying to write more in the style of Cassian.

I love writing poetry with rhymes, although I'd say my approach is usually more about what works best for the poem than about trying to stick with a style.

I'd say to me each poem has its own unique personality. 😊

Thanks for reading and commenting Klar! I always appreciate your thoughtful observations. 😊

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Darkly Dreaming Klar Nett's avatar

I think that's where the genre is at now. I even heard from a colleague she was penalised in her creative writing class for using rhymes which I think is taking things a bit too far. Rhymes can work so beautifully

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Carlos M.'s avatar

Seriously? That’s crazy!

I think everything has a place and rhymes have a place too. Sure, not everything has to rhyme, but if you want something to rhyme you shouldn’t be penalized for it.

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Aaliya's avatar

This is fabulous

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Carlos M.'s avatar

Thank you Aaliya.

I'm very lucky to have talented friends that like to collaborate with me. 😊

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Aaliya's avatar

Indeed but you are also a good writer 😊

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Carlos M.'s avatar

Thank you Aaliya, I appreciate that. 😊🙂‍↕️

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Carlos M.'s avatar

Thank you so much, I'm happy that you liked it.

We put a lot of work into it. 😊🙂‍↕️

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