Oh this was trully stunning. The form was straightforward but the beats so precise, definitely pulled at my heartstrings. The occasional rhyme sneaking through was a quiet delight
As you might have noticed I love solid structure. The formatting of the poem is part of the poem as much as the words. In this instance I saw each stanza as a headstone, a marker in the graveyard of meaning.
Solid, monumental, and brooding.
Then the short couplet is the epitaph engraved on each marker. “Here lies..”
I was reflecting back to my last week’s collection and the even simpler two-line poems and some of those are like ten to twelve words. I was thinking about what was the strength of those poems and think the strength is that those poems reveal the poetry inside the reader more than any poetry I can write.
I think this poem is similar. It’s almost cliché with many words and ideas appearing in my poetry before.
But the reader associating those words to their stories… I think that’s where the real poetry is found.
I like to think if anyone’s written a poem about heartbreak, they can read this poetry like it was about them.
My very first draft for this poem was three lines! “And I wrote poetry / so my heart could say the words / your heart would never hear”
Oh this was trully stunning. The form was straightforward but the beats so precise, definitely pulled at my heartstrings. The occasional rhyme sneaking through was a quiet delight
Absolutely straightforward but intentionally so. The emotional weight is there for the reader. 😊
killin me with this Carlos:
My poetry—
my graveyard of tears.
Cyn! Always happy to see you!
Feels like that sometimes doesn't it?
almost always…
🫂
Love the image!!!
Thanks! I wanted something that captured the contrast of the poem and I was happy to find that one.
Beautiful.
Thank you Stephanie!
I’m glad you liked it. 😊🙂↕️
Ahh my coffee has never tasted better 🤣🤣 beautiful work as always 💚
I live to make your coffee taste better 😁😂
Add it to your resume 🤣
Imma add it to my LinkedIn 😂🤣
All poems are about cats. Chasing cats. Herding cats. Feeding cats. Petting cats. Catfishing…
Burying our favourite cats in poetic word graveyards. Excellent poem sir. Great structure and use of echo to build up longing, regret and melancholy.
The inevitable cats of poetry! I love that! 😂
I like playing with structure in my poems. I feel like this poem is simple in the words and themes but the structure is what builds the journey.
As you might have noticed I love solid structure. The formatting of the poem is part of the poem as much as the words. In this instance I saw each stanza as a headstone, a marker in the graveyard of meaning.
Solid, monumental, and brooding.
Then the short couplet is the epitaph engraved on each marker. “Here lies..”
Yes! That's exactly right!
I wanted it to feel like someone walking through a graveyard, telling the story of what's in the grave and then reading the epitaph.
The format also helps so the change at the end feels earned instead of coming out of nowhere.
And I have absolutely observed and always appreciated your love for structure. 😁
Well you nailed it. Grand slam.
It’s interesting how this poem itself is very simple. No grand language. Just everyday words saying everyday things we all know and feel.
But the true artistry, the real craft is in the form and the flow. The layers evoking deeper meaning on each reread.
I was reflecting back to my last week’s collection and the even simpler two-line poems and some of those are like ten to twelve words. I was thinking about what was the strength of those poems and think the strength is that those poems reveal the poetry inside the reader more than any poetry I can write.
I think this poem is similar. It’s almost cliché with many words and ideas appearing in my poetry before.
But the reader associating those words to their stories… I think that’s where the real poetry is found.
I like to think if anyone’s written a poem about heartbreak, they can read this poetry like it was about them.
My very first draft for this poem was three lines! “And I wrote poetry / so my heart could say the words / your heart would never hear”
And then it evolved to this 😅
Check out my poem today. 6 lines. 15 words
An entire lifetime.
I haven’t been seeing your posts lately. This was a great piece. Thank you for sharing it.
Thank you for your comment, I appreciate that!
It’s odd you haven’t been seeing my posts… there’s been a few 😅
Regardless, I appreciate you reading any of them. 😊🙂↕️
Beautifully done. I loved reading that.
Thank you for the encouraging words Gary!
Happy to know you liked it. 😊